Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that
television
can be used for
education
while, others said that watching
television
is a sort of
entertainment
only.
This
essay agrees that
television
is a beneficial tool for
education
because it includes some educational
channels
free of cost and
people
does not get bore from watching lessons than reading them. Some
people
pointed out that,
television
is only used for
entertainment
which I do not agree with , because
Television
contains both educational and
entertainment
channels
.
People
have the choice to take advantage of both
channels
and used them according to their needs.
People
think that
television
is a sort of distraction, and it is there to entertain
people
nothing else.
For instance
, some parents put in their children’s mind that
television
is only to watch movies or to play video games,
this
as a result
discouraged children and they started to believe nothing valuable on TV for their studies. Studying from
television
makes
people
study’s process more appealing than reading the subject. I totally disagree that
television
is for entertaining
people
only,
however
, it is an essential device
could
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that could

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be used for educational purposes. There are a number of free
channels
which help the learner including different aspects, without paying for WIFI or any subscription fees.
This
type of
education
is affordable for
low class
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low-class

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people
who cannot spend money on Wi-Fi,
hence
,
television
is more than enough for them.
For example
during the pandemic in
Oman
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,Oman

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many
channels
are launched by the government to assist students who are studying from home, providing free tuition.
Therefore
, parents should encourage their children to use
television
to enhance their educational background. In conclusion, there are two groups, one who
state
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states

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the
television
is a good source of
education
, where
second
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the second

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group believe that
television
means
entertainment
only. I disagree with
who
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those who

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are saying that TV is used for
entertainment
,
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apply

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because TV includes various free
channels
which are significant for
education
as well.
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