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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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Nowadays, many international corporations have expanded their markets globally and people can easier purchase famous
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 in different countries.
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, some locals concern that the popularity of these global brands has brought setbacks to domestic businesses. In the following essays, I will discuss the potential problems and how to resolve these issues. It is true that multinational organizations have spent an enormous amount of budget for promoting their
products
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 globally at
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 competitive price.
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, they have gained trust and loyalty from many customers, which has created economic pressures on multiple domestic companies.
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, local brands have to find creative strategies to enhance local consumption or they will be removed from
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, the population may lose the diversity of they only purchase commodities from well-known companies.
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, it is feasible to spot a surge of youngsters wearing similar
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 from H&M or Zara on the street.
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, local authorities should play a key role in boosting the consumption of traditional goods. At
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, governments can support hand-made businesses through funding packages with low interest, which will help them reduce financial pressure and give room for creativity.
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, it is feasible to organize outdoor markets where local shops can promote their goods to tourists. Through media, governments can deliver meaningful messages about the benefits of using local
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 to their citizens. Japan is a typical example as the Japanese often prioritizes Japanese gadgets which boosts their
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 significance. To sum up, fiercely rivalry with multinational businesses have threatened the survival of traditional manufacturers, governments should take appropriate measures to maintain their national identities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • disrupts
  • entrepreneurship
  • economic diversity
  • monopolistic
  • financial power
  • homogenization
  • awareness campaigns
  • tax incentives
  • sustainability
  • artisan
  • eco-friendly
  • dominate
  • innovation
  • stifle
  • richness
  • cultures
  • traditions
  • highlighting
  • distinguish
  • superior
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