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As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree with such a procedure? Have you any reservations?

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very
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 responsible person and will take on the task of making the application
working
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 properly. Our general manager took charge of our
company
 nearly 10 years ago. Unfortunately, our
company
 is not sustainable to
this
 day. Covid
afffected
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affected
 drastically on
armenian
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 economy which is in
stand-still
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the stand-still
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 situation. We need a
high level
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 professional to laboriously clean up the messy code. Farmers
needs
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 additional resources to be able to grade the harvest for export. We
coudl
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could
 say that Armenia is now
in
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 economic blockade as the borders with Turkey as its
hiterland
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homeland
 is closed. Our society is pondering regarding possible
was
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 with his enemy countries. There are colleagues
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is
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 trying to render
obsolite
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obsolete
 your role in all projects you are involved in. Citizens of Armenia are under the stress of browbeatening
speeachs
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speeches
 of their enemies. The pupils were very silent and frightened as they were cowed by their
sschool
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school
 director.
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 at a time when borders will be
opened
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 we'll go to sea. Some of my friends are cursing the governing
polititians
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politicians
 as lackeys of foreign forces. Our second president is a
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 of
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.
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 is very easy to squander the trust of your team
due to
 poor management. We are raising questions like what use we could make of joining the big power. Our team should make use of possibilities in the market and
do
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 a big jump. Syunik is located astride on the very important roads which connect Iran with
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 sea and
Azerbajyan
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Azerbaijan
 with Turkey. Hopefully, we could compete in our domain only if we could make use of our parent
company
 resources. The government
urge
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 the opposition to stop spreading the panic in society. We should be driven by our
virceral
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visceral
virtual
 urges to mobilize our resources for the next fight. Lots of your and vigorous people
are fail
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 their small businesses
due to
 the lack of business
eduction
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.
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 our colleagues are sane enough to work as one team for
company
 survival.
While
worldwide
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 economy is unstable it daunting the
business
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 to invest
into
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 new initiatives. Villagers
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 felt relief with
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 news of releasing the prisoners.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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