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The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems…so who do u think should be responsible for solving it? Is it the governments, organization or each individual?

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The bar chart compares the habits of buying or drinking different types of
coffee
 among the
people
 in 5 different
cities
 of Australia within
last
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 4 weeks. Overall, it can be seen in the chart that
people
 tend to go to a café for
coffee
 or tea more than buying
coffee
 in the mentioned
cities
.
Furthermore
, in all of the
cities
,
people
 are less eager to buy fresh
coffee
 in comparison with buying instant
coffee
. In terms of going to café, the most leading
cities
 are Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart, with an average
percentage
 of about 63. The percentages of
People
 who went to café in Brisbane and Adelaide came in fourth and fifth of the list, with a
percentage
 around 55 and 50 respectively. Regarding buying
coffee
, the average
percentage
 of
people
 who bought instant
coffee
 is higher than fresh
coffee
. Almost 50
percent
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per cent
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 of
population
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the population
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 in all
cities
 bought instant
coffee
. In Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart, around 40
percent
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per cent
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 of
population
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the population
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 bought fresh
coffee
.
In addition
, the
percentage
 of
people
 who bought fresh
coffee
 in Brisbane and Adelaide is just below 35
percent
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per cent
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.
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