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Some people believe that the responsibility for the protection of the environment is by a transnational organization, rather than by each individual country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The worsening of the
environment
 has been a considerable cause for concern among people from all walks of life. It is generally claimed that an international body should be solely accountable for environmental protection; I strongly believe that,
however
, it is the duty of each
country
 and the concerted effort among all nations worldwide. Of utmost importance is each individual state’s contribution to the common cause of preventing the
environment
 from deteriorating any
further
. In fact, it is the
country
that is
 in and under direct contact and the impact of climate changes that would feel it most clearly.
Therefore
, the most appropriate measures would be able to be invented and implemented.
For example
, if a city of a
country
 is suffering from water pollution, it is the inhabitants in that city would suffer the most and local authorities are those who work directly with them
,
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 and
thus
 understand their problems mostly correctly. It is hardly possible,
nonetheless
, for experts from other countries to fully grasp the magnitude of the problem if they just go to the site to do research to tackle the symptoms of the problem only. Added to
this
 is the function of an international organization that gives the most general guidance and in charge of the overall functioning of the global
environment
. It is true that if a minor part of the
environment
 is adversely affected or damaged, there can be calamitous ramifications on other regions of the world as a whole.
Besides
, in order for an organization of global influence to be established, there should be a consensus among all the nations involved. It means that
this
 establishment has the trust among its members to give guidance, support as well as a necessary intervention when an environmental issue arises in any nation. In short, to reverse the damaging effects on the
environment
, it is the role of each
country
, which is most crucial, coupled with the guidance and support from a worldwide organization.
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