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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

#job #satisfaction #luxury #countries
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 all of us is seeking
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satisfaction
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, few of us is considered lucky, particularly in developing countries where despite its importance,
job
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satisfaction
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 is pushed to the background due to economic factors.
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 can be explained by dissatisfaction with all other primary needs which are of a higher priority compared to
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satisfaction
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. The population of pre-industrial countries has no other choice than to satisfy its psychological and safety needs
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, and only after that citizens can think about
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satisfaction
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. Getting pleasant and attractive
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 mainly is affordable in case of financial stability and it requires financial losses for the
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 period of time.
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, in Armenia and in almost all post-Soviet countries, the average
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 class employee probably won’t hesitate to
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 hard and at not so pleasing
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 to be sure that he and his family is full and safe and will think about changing his employment sector to something more thrill when he will not be afraid of some of his accumulated wealth.
Job
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satisfaction
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 is important in the aspect of benefits it provides, particularly increases in productivity is the case. A person who has no reason to complain about the
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 is more effective and approaches his
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 more seriously and creatively. He can spend hours on
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 without even getting worn out of it. Writing about
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, I always remember a friend of mine who used to be a clerk at the office and was always described as a sluggish person, but after selling his car and becoming a software engineer using the money gained from the sale, everybody who knows him was amazed at his passion toward the new
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.
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, no matter how many financial constraints and lack of resources will interfere, everyone should strive for achieving
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satisfaction
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