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Some people think that when many imported tv programs or films are shown in country. it can improve the country’s culture.others feeling is better for a country to make and broadcast its own local movie.Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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We are living in the digital age,where most of the population use to watch any
TV
 programmes or films.Some
people
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think that
tv
programs
 or films should be produced locally and broadcast
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.While others believe that it should be imported as it helps
people
 to understand the different cultures.I believe
taht
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that
 both the
programs
 produced locally and internationally should be broadcasted because both have
its
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 own perks.
Firstly
,the
tv
 shows or movies imported from outside of
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the
country
it
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helps
people
 to get
overall
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an overall
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 idea of that
country
's culture and many more things. It is one of the best methods to learn foreign
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language
languages
.
Also
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people
 can learn
attiquates
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antiquates
attitudes
,
maners
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manners
 and idea of that nation.Imported
TV
 shows enhance the mental horizon of the viewer . That gives
different
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 perspective to the matter.
For example
, after watching the
movioe
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movie
movies
 like Harry Potter a
lot
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 children inspire to study hard and work hard. On the
othe
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other
 hand, the
tv
 series or movies made locally enhance the understanding of their own local culture. In
this
mordern
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modern
 era, there are some
people
 who are not aware of their own
country
's glorious past or tradition.
Furthermore
, the movies like 'Kesari' encourage the feeling of patriotism. The major
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 is That population can get employment through it because it needs a large team to produce any movie. I believe that all the
programs
 produced locally or internationally should be broadcasted because
programs
 produced outside of the
country
 helps to get the knowledge of
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 .
However
 ,there
are
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 some downside
of
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 it.
First
 of all, some audience blindly
follow
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 the culture which is not good . While on the
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other
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othe r
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other
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 side, if it's produced locally it can improve the economy of the
country
 as
money
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the money
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 remains locally. All in all, it can be concluded that there should not be any restriction for broadcasting it . But
aundience
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audience
audiences
 should wisely decide it which films or
tv
shows
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 good for them,
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