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supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

#supermarkets #food #country #imports
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Convenience
stores
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 should put more emphasis to sell
the
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local
food
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 products rather than purchase from foreign countries.I
am totally agree
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 with
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 statement.
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it
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,some grocery
stores
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 sell overseas
food
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 rather than the traditional
food
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 which are grown in their own country.
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,they are doing so to increase the sales of
stores
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.The grocery
stores
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 display different variety in front of buyers that are imported from overseas.So,consumers prefer to buy prepared canned
food
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 items as compared to local
food
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 especially youth because they
don
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 not time to make meals.In that way,they forgot their traditional
food
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 . If people give more
preferrance
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preference
 to their local products
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 the unemployment rate would decrease.People would grow vegetables and fruits by themselves by extending farms.
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,a lot of people get a chance for employment.
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,they do not need to spend
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money to purchase foreign
food
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.It leads to improve the economy of the country.Apart from that,especially
youngesters
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youngsters
 get a chance to make familiar with their residential
food
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. To conclude,
i
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 believe that grocery
stores
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 should prefer the local products rather than imported ones .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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