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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Arranging the multi-country sports games is a way to compete among each country in a friendly manner. I strongly believe that holding these regularly is essential in expressing the friendship and trust between the
countries
 and is to strengthen the diplomatic relations. So, I genuinely think that it is an excellent action in building a peaceful nation. Being a host means inviting the guest to our country and giving them a chance to learn about our culture and heritage.
This
 can assist in developing tourism and in turn, improving the investment from foreign
countries
 and the economy.
For instance
, the 27th Sea Game was held in
Myanmar
 with ASEAN
countries
 as participants and
Myanmar
 gain plenty of recognition from
this
 event. The downside of
this
 whole scheme might be the need of allocating a huge amount of budget for the occasion and for the developing
countries
 it is quite tough. As
Myanmar
 is a developing country in South East Asia, it was challenging for them to invite the ASEAN
countries
.
However
,
Myanmar
 was able to pull
this
 off in 2013, a small step but a giant leap for
Myanmar
. To conclude, it is a very nice idea to celebrate international sports events regularly and
this
 behaviour between the nations indicate that the world is changing to a better place. For the future generation, the war and conflicts among the
countries
 should only be in the history books.
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