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Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education
Quite often people say parents who
sends
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 their
children
 to private
school
 need not pay
taxes
 to support
overall
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the overall
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education
system
. In
this
 essay I will discuss why not paying
taxes
 will increase
burden
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the burden
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 overall
education
system
,
i
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I
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 believe
this
 is not a good idea.
Firstly
,
i
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I
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 believe parents who send their
children
 to private
shcools
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schools
 are financially capable enough to support the
education
 of their kids and simultaneously pay
taxes
 to
enchance
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enhance
overall
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the overall
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edcuation
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education
system
. At the same time if those families are discouraged for not paying
taxes
 it will increase pressure on public funds and
utlimately
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ultimately
 impacts
overall
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the overall
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education
system
.
Secondly
, it
create
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creates
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economic
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an economic
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 imbalance and put pressure on the knowledge
system
. Private schools will be full of
children
 who comes from
wealthy
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a wealthy
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 background and looks for quality
education
 whereas on
other hand
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another hand
other hands
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 public
school
 will have students coming from underprivilege
back ground
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background
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 who solely depends on public
school
 and government funds for their
education
.
Also
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 it will put pressure on teaching staff on where to join, as private
education
 will ready to pay
higer
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higher
 salary which will attract good quality teachers leaving little or no room for public
school
 for best teacher. To conclude,
i
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I
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beleive
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believe
 parents who
sends
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send
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children
 should
also
 be encouraged to pay
taxes
 for
overall
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the overall
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 growth of
education
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the education
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system
 as knowledge is
foundation
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the foundation
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 for any country to prosper and
growth
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grow
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.
Education
 is an important and fundamental pillar for any nation to go on
path
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the path
a path
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 of economic development.
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