Some people opine that cinema will eventually lose its appeal to mass people and very few people will go to cinema halls. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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of individuals going to movie halls has been decline and might lose their customers in future. Due to globalization,
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majority of activities on weekend and has
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of home. To commence with,
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range of leisure activities rather than going to movie
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because globalization has brought everything in the small village.
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of the week.
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number of restaurants and those
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love to go out for dinner on weekend and spend quality
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with their friends and family.
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of the week, my friends and I go to Mexican restaurants for dinner and walk around
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has shifted toward different things from going to cinema halls.
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, Internet has made life easier and convenient and provides us with series of applications to watch
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, play video games in our comfort zone.
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, individuals to their leisure
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with their families by watching movies on Netflix
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of going out.
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on youtube
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streaming channels on
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movies. In the conclusion, I agree with
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that
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shifted their interest from going cinema halls and watch
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at home and do different stuff on weekends to enjoy with their loved ones.
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