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Some people feel that young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others, however, believe that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the opinion that youngsters are advised to adhere to the
traditions
 of their
society
.
However
, others argue that the young
generation
 is liberty at behaving as individuals. From my perspective, I subscribe to the latter idea. On the one hand, not all
traditions
 are suitable for young people’s personalities, thoughts and behaviours, leading to the fact that it will prove challenging for the young
ones
 to follow those
ones
.
For example
, my countryside has a
tradition
 that people are not allowed to marry others being the same age but nowadays, the young
ones
 have refused to obey
this
tradition
 and are willing to marry any people having the same age.
In addition
,
although
 some
traditions
 are inappropriate for the development of
society
, they are still common in some places and in
this
 case, if the young
generation
 follows them, it will not beneficial to them.
For instance
, there is a
tradition
 in Vietnam that fathers shoulder the responsibility for making money while mothers have to stay at home to do housework and rear their offspring. Undoubtedly, currently, no one accepts
this
tradition
, especially for female teenagers.
Therefore
, it is virtually impossible for the young
generation
 to adhere to
this
tradition
.
On the other hand
, it is crucially important to obey the
traditions
 of
society
, particularly for the young
generation
 since
this
 is the best solution to preserve those
traditions
. To be more specific, they reflect the national identity of a country, so traditional preservation is necessary.
Therefore
, only when people, especially the young
ones
 value and appreciate those
traditions
, they will be less likely to fade away in the future and
as a result
, the national identity of a country will
also
 have a low possibility of disappearing. In conclusion, with all the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that it is better for youngsters having the freedom to behave as individuals in lieu of following the
traditions
 of their
society
.
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