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In some countries, governments provide payments for unemployed people. How does this impact people? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In a number of countries, some amount of money is paid for
people
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 who do not have
work
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. It might help
people
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 to overcome some hurdles, but do not motivate them to find a new job, at the same time. I believe that it is a negative tendency, and
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 might be detrimental to the country’s economy. One of the consequences of providing payments for those who lost their jobs is that it is an excellent way to support them.
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, some time is needed to be spent in order to find a new position, and it may continue for months.
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, it is great to receive money from the government while searching for a job and do not be afraid of losing your possessions. Another impact is that
people
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 become lazier and do not want to
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 at all.
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, humans get used to the situation and just do not want to force themselves with
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. So, their inner values are changing significantly, which leads to the unwillingness to
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. I think that financial support will badly affect the economy of a country.
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 supported by the government are not interested in finding a new job and raise their own income.
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, the labour market is struggling because of the lack of professionals and cannot meet the requirements of the companies.
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, there is a need to fill the local budgets in order to pay money for unemployed
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, having a low level of working citizens do not allow to do it fully.
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, often the government has to raise taxes to fulfil its duties. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that payments for job-seekers might be helpful for them, it will have a negative impact on the economy in general.
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