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Living in large cities today's poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in a smaller town.

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Nowadays, more and more
people
 live in
cities
 in comparison to the past.
This
 trend will likely continue in future.
This
 has caused many
problems
 for urban dwellers,
such
 as overcrowding and sicknesses. The
government
 should make some great strides in
this
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these
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 terms to encourage
people
 to live in suburb areas
instead
 of metropolises and makes more attractions in those areas.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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the
problems
, which have arisen due to
this
 phenomenon and measures which should be taken by the
government
 to solve or ease these
problems
. There
are
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 a wide range of drawbacks, which associated with the  rise of modern
cities
, but one of the most obvious
issue
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issues
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 is related to
the
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population  density.
This
For instance
, the cost of living has increased considerably in
cities
, which leads to
people
 willingly work overtime and place themselves under these unfavourable conditions.
Moreover
, the  workplace is a competitive domain and
people
 have to devote more time
for
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 their work to meet their needs. In
cities
that
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 population has increased extremely,
people
 usually can not afford their basic needs, which caused a number of
problems
 for individuals. Admittedly, living in
cities
 can bring a lot of advantages for individuals
such
 as job opportunities on more practical educational facilities, but nearly most of
people
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the people
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 living in
cities
 often suffer from sicknesses, which often caused by
estress
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stress
. Unfortunately, stress is one of the
main
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 reason
of
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 infecting to mental and physical disease, which leave a damaging effect on children's future. One of the most crucial
duty
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 of the
government
 in
this
 trem is providing  more practical facilities in suburbs to hinder
this
 amount of
emmigration
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immigration
emigration
 to
mega
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megacities
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cities
.
Furthermore
, the
government
 should improve
financial
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the financial
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 situation of
people
 living in suburbs by making more desirable job opportunities, which play a momentous role in encouraging
people
 to live in
this
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 areas. In conclusion, I am convinced that if the
government
 takes a number of practical measures
this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
 can be solved or eased. According to the above analyses.
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