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Writing, reading and maths are the three recognized traditional subjects. Computer skill should also be the fourth largest branch. Do you agree or disagree ?

#maths #three #subjects #computer #skill #branch
Writing and reading are
heart
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 and brain of every
humans
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human's
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life
, without that no one can live longer with full functional abilities. Writing, reading and
maths
 all very important
skills
 to survive in
world
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the world
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, but as
currently
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,currently
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 the
world
 is opening its hand towards technology
computer
 learning is
also
 become essential. Expressing common opinion of people on
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 topic, it is likely to say that writing and reading
are hold
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 the top priority position whereas
maths
 and
computer
 hold a secondary position. Leaving a
life
 as a human in
this
world
 requires communication on day-to-day
basic
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basis
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 and
communiation
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communication
 itself is a cocktail of essential
skills
 like writing, reading, speaking and
listning
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listening
.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
 speaking and
listning
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listening
 will be learned
automatially
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automatically
 with time in
life
, but writing and reading
is
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skills
 which require to and
prectice
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practice
 to have a good hand on it. Every person living in the universe has only become successful in their occupation
,
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 if they have
this
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these
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 basic
skills
. Furthur expressing the belief
mathmatics
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mathematics
 is essential but only the basic
maths
 which we learn while in school. Integration,
differentitation
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differentiation
, serious solution are few of the difficult concepts which are very rare use in future and are not necessarily
imporatant
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important
 to learn to handle
a
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an
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 occupation related to
corporate
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the corporate
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world
,
however
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,however
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 if
anyne
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anyone
 has
dream
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a dream
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 to become scientist than
this
 skill becomes important.
Moreover
,
computer
skills
 have vital importance in every person's
life
 whether he is doing
corporate
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the corporate
a corporate
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 job or want to become
scientist
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a scientist
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. In conclusion, writing and reading become the most valuable asset in every person's
life
 and
maths
 along with
computer
 has succeeding rank. Not everyone needs to have
great
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a great
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 hand in
maths
 and
computer
 they can learn
this
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these
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skills
 as per the requirement.
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