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Today more and more people are using mobile phone and computer. Thus, the communication ability is losing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Now-a-days
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 every individual on
this
 planet has access to electronic gadgets,all thanks to advancement in science and technology. I reckon that use of mobile phone and computer has bought the world closer and has advanced the
communication
 ability
thus
 I disagree with the view that today more and more people are using these
communication
 devices are leading to
loss
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a loss
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 in
communication
 ability.
Humanbeing
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Human beings
Human being
are
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 social animals and verbal
communication
 is an important way of expressing their feelings and views.These electronic gadgets have made
communication
 seamless, one can connect with people around the world without
traveling
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 and is just a call or click away. Written communications can
also
 be done instantly with the support of these inventions. Today physical letters have been replaced by Emails.
Thus
 no transportation of letters is required and the
communication
 reaches the recipient instantly within minutes to any part of the world.
Furthermore
 one can talk face to face with clients , friends and family without
traveling
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 to visiting them in person.
This
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has
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 been possible with the help of these smart devices only . To conclude, I will reiterate that mobile and computers have rather spiked the ability to communicate
amoung
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among
 homosapiens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Global connections
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Communication skills
  • Digital divide
  • Social networks
  • Virtual communication
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Cognitive empathy
  • Digital literacy
  • Social isolation
  • Cyber communication
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Screen time
  • Digital detox
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