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Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. is this a positive or negative development?

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Almost all schools have canteens, cafeterias, or vending machines for
students
. Educational institutes make a good amount of money by selling junk
food
; children get easily attracted to fast
food
. In my view,
this
 negatively affects the
health
 of
students
 and their savings. Providing fast
food
 to
students
 can lead to various diseases,
This
 is simply because
such
 foods are not healthy for
students
 but the presence of
such
food
 increases the urge in
students
 to eat.
For instance
, obesity and diabetes result from unhealthy and wrong eating patterns. The main reason is that these foods have more calories and have excess oil in them.
Thus
, selling unhealthy
food
 and soda drinks can negatively affect student’s
health
 in long term.
In addition
 to well-being issues,
such
 development can financially affect
students
 and their parents. The main reason behind
this
 is that
students
 tend to eat more at schools rather than eating homemade
food
,
as a result
, they will spend money in canteens on regular basis.
For instance
, the variety of
food
 at canteens attracts
students
 towards them.
Therefore
, selling
food
 can be profitable for the institute but is fruitless for
students
. To conclude, despite the cafe or canteen are an essential source of income for the schools but the quality or type of
food
 can affects
students
health
 and money. With firm changes in menu or by making it more healthy, it can be beneficial towards
students
health
 and for the institute.
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