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Some business find that their new employees lack in basic interpersonal skills such as the lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes and suggest possible solutions? Also provide relevant examples from your experience.

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The multi-national companies recruit new graduates every year from either campus recruitment or pool recruitment. They have many recruitment phases to filter out
students
, but,
still
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 companies may recruit
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potential candidate who has a lack of ability to
work
 with companions as a team. Every graduate enters the corporate world as soon as its graduation completes. College life to entry in the organisation is a very long shot, but teenagers do not have much time to prepare themselves for
such
 a scenario. In university
students
 always enjoy their studies without any fear of deadlines and Boss.
Therefore
 they never feel to gain their potential in interpersonal
skills
, they just go, study, enjoy and come back home,
this
 cycle
work
 as their routine.
This
 is why new joiners lack basic interpersonal
skills
such
 as the lack of ability to
work
 with colleagues as a team. An effective strategy to solve
this
 problem will be,
firstly
 the program can be initiated in the graduate institute in which persons who are working in an organisation and have very good command over their
work
 can come and deliver their experiences and tips to enhance
students
 organisational working
skills
,
Secondly
 a weekly or monthly visit can be arranged in one of the corporate sectors to have a feel of its working culture ,
Finally
students
 who are rigorously interested in developing these
skills
 can join an internship. In conclusion, Universities has to take initiative and help
students
 to gain expertise in interpersonal
skills
 by the ways mentioned in the preceding paragraph.
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