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some people think that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career ,while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. discuss both views

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Education plays an important role in an individual's life. Many people believe that youngsters should go for
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higher studies to get a successful
job
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 where others think that after schooling it is better to make a
career
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. In my opinion, both have their own pros and cons to get a
job
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.
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firstly
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, some believe that one should not waste time in
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 study. An individual can make a
career
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 straight after school. He can earn money at a young age and can buy
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 own home and car.
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, A Canadian speaker Alaskan Stuart starts his
career
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 at a very young age. He never went to high school and now, He earns a lot of money at a young age.
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, it has drawbacks too. One cannot apply to
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multinational companies. If a
person
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 wants to get a
job
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 in MNCs
then
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 he must have to
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pass his graduation.
On the other hand
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, To get a
job
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 in
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 reputed organization one should have knowledge about the particular field. When a
person
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 goes to a college and university to get a degree there he learns many other things
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Tech Mahindra, when a
person
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 applying for a
job
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, they
first
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 consider the degree is
this
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 valid for the particular
job
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. Nowadays, higher education is a must to get a
job
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 in a reputed company.
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, there are
also
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 drawbacks. When a
person
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 gets a
job
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 after graduation he has to struggle more to establish in a reputed organization. To conclude, In my opinion, making a successful
career
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 after schooling or graduation has its own benefits and drawbacks. It all depends on personal views how they want to get a
job
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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