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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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DETAILS CONCERNING THE CURRENT SETUP OF A
SPORTS
 CENTER IN A UNIVERSITY AND HOW IT WILL APPEAR FOLLOWINGS ITS PLANNED EXPANSION ARE DEPICTED IN THE GIVEN PLANS. OVERALL, WHAT IS NOTABLE IS THAT, WHILE THE ENTIRE MAIN BUILDING WILL NOT UNDERGO ALTERATIONS, A RADICAL TRANSFORMATION IS PLANNED FOR BOTH THE OUTDOOR COURTS. AT PRESENT, THE ENTRANCE AREA OF THE
SPORTS
 FACILITY HAS ONLY A RECEPTION WHICH HAS
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DOORWAYS ON EACH SIDE. WHILE THE DOOR BY THE WEST SIDE LEADS INTO THE
CHAGING
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CHANGING
CHARGING
 ROOM, THE OTHER LEADS TO THE SEATING AREA. THESE ROOMS ENCLOSES A 25M POOL, WITH A GYM ON ITS NORTH. OUTSIDE THE FACILITY ARE TWO OUTDOOR COURTS WHICH FLANK THE MAIN BUILDING. AFTER THE RENOVATION, THE ENTRANCE AREA WILL ACCOMMODATE A
SPORTS
 SHOP ON ITS SOUTHWESTERN CORNER AND A CAFE ON ITS EAST SOUTHERN CORNER, AND THESE WILL BACK ONTO NEW CHANGING ROOMS. THE GYM IN THE MAIN BUILDING WILL HAVE BEEN EXTENDED EASTWARD TO CONNECT WITH TWO ADJOINING DANCE STUDIOS. MEANWHILE, THE ONCE OUTDOOR COURTS IN THE WEST PORTION OF THE MAIN BUILDING WILL HAVE BEEN REPLACED COMPLETELY IN FAVOR OF A LEISURE POOL WHICH QUITE LARGER THAN THE CURRENT POOL. THE OUTDOOR COURT ON THE EAST WILL HAVE BEEN CONVERTED INTO A
SPORTS
 HALL.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • redevelopment
  • expansion
  • modern amenities
  • recreational activities
  • cater
  • enhancement
  • aesthetics
  • accommodate
  • upgraded
  • welcoming
  • significantly expanded
  • current layout
  • future layout
  • gym enthusiasts
  • modernized
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