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There are several social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve these problems to what extent do you agree or disagree

#consequences #shortages #cities #government
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It is ruggedly true that with an
escalate
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 in population the demand for the flats
are
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 at its peak point due to which multifarious of
people
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 are facing deficiency of houses it is believed that only the administration can combat
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 issues but according to my stance certain step should be
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 taken by the
people
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 rather than fully relying on the government
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am partially agree
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 with the above statement to
to
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certain plausible factors that will be discussed in the following fragments. To embark on, nowadays
people
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 are covering an extra land just to use it for
parking
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 area or for a gardening purpose which ought to be avoided by them.So, that space can be utilised in an effective way by someone else. To elaborate, in India humans are in a habit to build up an enormous house with a separate gyming section, barbeques for
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, personal garages which required a lot of
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space.
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,women open their institution and kindergarten without any permission from an appropriate authority.
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, it is illegal and
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 huge land do
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, nuclear families are especially,seem to be living in
a big houses
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a big house
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 which
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 not required because they can just live in a medium for small spaces only.
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,
people
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 must avoid
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 things to eliminate
housing
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the housing
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 shortage issue. On the flip side, it is
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duty
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the duty
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 of the lawmakers to control
landing
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 system which is being used by humans in an inappropriate way by imposing certain rules and regulations.
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, flats should be more promoted by them rather than allocating colonies, it will lead to
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 of land
iand
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and
 everyone can live properly.
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, extra malls and unnecessary shop should be e covering main highways road should be prohibited. To recapitulate, after pondering over the plenty of thoughts and deliberation, I contemplate
template
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 that to
fulfill
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 the needs of housing both
people
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 and government must join their hands and start putting efforts simultaneously to curb
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 problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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