A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seems important.

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The bar chart indicates the changes in travel habits of employees in a specific village in New Zealand for 1996 and 2006. Units are measured in
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and nine forms of commuting are shown.
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, there is a form “worked at home”
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non-commuting. Overall, it can be noticed that in both years, travelling to work by private
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or trucks was the highest choice of commuters.
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, it can
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be seen that the highest
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of commuters travelling to work by private
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was registered in 1996. The
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of employed people that used private
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or trucks to get to work was about 50% in 1996, after which the figure fell to around 36% in 2006, a drop of around 14%. In 1996, the
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of commuters that used company vehicles (around 7-9%) was not too different from the rate of people that walked or jogged.
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, use of company
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rose to well over 10% in 2006 but walking, jogging and home working fell to 7% and 5% respectively. As reported in the graph, the use of the public bus and bicycle both rose from around 5% to 10% in 2006.
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, it can be declared that use of trains, motorcycles and other forms of commuting
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very uncommon with a
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of about 5% and 2% respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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