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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys ?

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Some kids are loaded with toys by their
parents
. Due to the lack of time to play with them, some
parents
 buy
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 objects, trying to mitigate the insufficient attention. In
this
 essay, I will outline the positive sides and drawbacks of
this
 exaggerated gifting to children.
To begin
 with, looking at the upsides of
this
 trend, kids that notably have lots of toys waste most of their time playing.
For instance
, one case in point would be exemplified by the movie ToyStory. In the movie, the main human character, Andy, has so many objects in his room that the number of playing he created alone were uncountable.
Moreover
, in the case of
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 only child, as Andy in the movie, receive a large number of toys to play
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 help infants to improve
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 creativity, as in the majority, they do not have someone to play with, forcing them to use their imagination to have fun. In stark contrast, there are a
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 downsides consequent of
this
 phenomenon. To illustrate
this
, one study conducted by
psychology
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 department of the State University of Ceará has shown that
parents
 who spend some time playing with their children, these minors are more likely to be happier and do not suffer from the lack of tutors attention. Taking the aforementioned example, the same study concluded that children
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parents
 are present and who receive gifts
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 special occasions only
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 tends to grow without
parents
 mental linked disorders. To summarize, giving presents to minors is not a setback, since their tutors are gifting them in order to make them feel special and not as a surrogate
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attention
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