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In some countries, girls and boys are educated in different schools rather than in the same school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In many nations across the world, boys and girls are sent to separate
schools
.
This
 discussion will discuss
about
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the advantages of
this
 trend and
then
 outline its drawbacks. To start with, the main advantage of doing
this
 is that there are minimal chances of sexual abuse. It makes one feel safe and secure when one is among children of one’s own
gender
. Another merit is that they do not have to deal with any kind of distraction which takes away their focus from their studies, unlike in mixed
schools
, where boys and girls get attracted to each other and lose focus on their studies.
Also
, it has been found that the success rate of
single
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gender
schools
 is higher than that of co-educational
schools
.
However
, there are some demerits to sending children to the same
gender
schools
.
Firstly
, it becomes very difficult for a child to interact with a person of
opposite
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gender
. Not only do they find it difficult to talk, but they
also
 get a little conscious and confused about their behaviour at that moment.
Secondly
,
this
 gives rise to
gender
 discrimination. From a very young age, boys and girls get knowledge of the different kind of treatment they receive on the basis of their
gender
 and
this
 gives rise to much bigger issues in
the
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society. To conclude,
although
 there are advantages to educating children in separate institutes based on their
gender
, it should not be forgotten that
this
 arrangement does have some adverse ramifications.
This
 may help with their academic grades, but it could hurt their social skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • segregation
  • discrimination
  • gender-specific
  • distractions
  • focus
  • safe
  • comfortable
  • gender stereotypes
  • social interaction
  • interpersonal skills
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