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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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We are living in
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 21 century, but
still
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 every
country
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 has
poverty
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. The biggest reasons in my opinion are the
economy
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 structure of the
country
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 and the lack of
education
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, which I will discuss in detail in
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Firstly
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, the economic structure of the
country
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 makes the greatest contribution
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country's
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the country's
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 development and the population which lives under
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poverty
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 line. Some
countries
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 have the best
economy
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 structure, but
still
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 they miss the point where to focus to reduce the number of poor
people
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. In my opinion, each
country
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 must have the same regulations for poor and rich
people
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, where everyone has
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equal right. To reduce the number of poor
people
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,
countries
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 should make some separate laws for considering the situation.
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, a
country
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 can impose low TAX's on poor
people
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 for
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the first
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 few years to give them a chance to improve their financial situation.
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,
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education
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 makes
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 significant amount of impact on
poverty
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.
Illitrate
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Illiterate
people
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 will not be able to earn
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 significant amount of money to support their family needs and they will just have to rely on the labour work. They will earn by doing the labour work, but will not be able to earn enough, and they
wil
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will
 be pressed under the burden of
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poverty
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 day by day. Each
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countries
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country
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sould
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should
could
would
 have some laws regarding
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basic
education
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.
Countries
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 should provide free
education
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 to encourage the
people
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. To recapitulate, all
countries
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 should have
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 economic
strucature
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structure
 which include the
people
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 of all financial class
,
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 and must encourage the
people
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 to increase the
litracy
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literacy
 rate by providing free
education
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. As it is truly said, "
Education
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 is the
birth right
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birthright
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 of every child."

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • economic policies
  • poverty cycle
  • job opportunities
  • government intervention
  • small businesses
  • corruption
  • poverty alleviation
  • conflict and instability
  • international aid
  • peacekeeping efforts
  • healthcare access
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