Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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and usefulness of the free of charge

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in extra time both for the youth, being involved

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the process and the society. In my opinion, teenagers can become more aware of their own life, doing some community duties, that, in the end, can help to raise up people, who are more sympathetic and responsible for other members of the society.

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, the young people, who make some household in nursery houses or

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in uncommercial organizations to help the homeless with food and shelter begin to be conscious of difficulties of life and,

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, become self-contained and determined persons quicker, compared to those, who don’t encounter with problem situations and

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groups.

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it, being incorporated in the community

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without any payment, teenagers, living in marginal blocks and districts, can be so busy and

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by these initiatives, that might be prevented from becoming

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, or other types of guilt. At the same time, unpaid

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. So to conclude, as

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me, the unpaid

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among teenagers for the

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of society can bring up the

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-minded future generations, who fully understand the seriousness of the problems of lower groups and classes. Actually,

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can help to make inclusive communities.

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about involving the youth in some common strategies, which are started by city authorities

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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unpaid
community work
benefit
teenagers
life skills
volunteering
empathy
compassion
socially aware
responsible
interact
diverse backgrounds
cultural understanding
tolerance
work experience
essential skills
employment
interests
passions
career development
contribute
betterment
development
local community
mental well-being
stress
self-esteem
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academic
personal lives
time management
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balance
participate
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numerous benefits
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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Environmental damage is a problem in most countries. What is the cause of this damage? What should be done about this problem?

The government should impose a fee on drivers who use their vehicle during rush hour to help cut down on air pollution from exhaust fumes. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Too much attention is given to headline-grabbing disasters like earthquakes and floods. Governments should concentrate their resource on educating people about the risk they face nearer to their home, which can cost far more lives . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

The only way to improve safety in our roads is to give stricter punishment for driving offenses. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

An overseas friend has invited you to visit his country. You are planning to visit him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter  Thank him for the invitation and accept the invitation  Write details about your visit  Briefly describe what you want to do there.