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Some people think that developing a successful career is more important than spending time with family and friends, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Homelessness and poverty is a terrible but topical issue in both more economically advanced and less industrialised countries. To deal with
this
, many
people
 feel that a small proportion of everyone’s income should be used to aid the homeless and poor.
This
 could create more opportunities and change the lives of many disadvantaged
people
 for the better. Though there are certain facilities
such
 as shelters and soup kitchens to aid the poor and homeless, it is clear that
this
 is not enough. In the U.S. alone, a very developed country in itself, nearly two million
people
 are homeless. These facilities can lend a helpful hand;
however
, they do not help eradicate the problem. Those
people
 who are homeless or poor can have trouble finding jobs, or, if they are lucky to gain employment, the pay may not be enough to support them and their families. If a small percentage of everyone’s income was used to help build more aid facilities and fund organisations to help the homeless and poor, the suffering of many
people
 could be alleviated.
However
,
this
 is not a perfect world, and taxes are high enough for many
people
. A similar argument could be that a portion of the taxes already paid to the government should
then
 be set aside for
this
 cause, but of
course
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 government funds are usually stretched to breaking point as it is, as governments have so many financial responsibilities already. Though the fundamental idea that
people
 should pay a small percentage of their income to help the homeless and poor is admirable, it is unlikely that enough
people
 would agree to it.
People
 need all the money they earn after taxes anyway and,
although
 governments already have too many calls on their available funds, in my
view
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 they should prioritise support payments for the homeless.
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