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Some people say that schools should reward students who show the best academic results. While others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

#people #schools #reward #students #show #results #improvements
It has been
conflict
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 between people, whose is more deserving
students
, that should be rewarded. Some individuals opine that
students
get
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who get
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 on the top list should be
reward
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a reward
the reward
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. While others believe that
students
which
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who
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 shows improvement needs reward.
This
 assignment intends to delve
both
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into both
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 perspectives and in my
opinion
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 both did
effort
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an effort
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 to get better results.
However
, I believe that the
student
 which does great improvement should be appreciated. On the one hand, topper
students
 should be rewarded because it
encourage
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 them to do
best
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their best
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 in the upcoming exams.
In addition
 to
this
, they did a lot of
hardwork
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hard work
 to achieve a
first
 position in the class, they are truly deserving
appreciation
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of appreciation
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.
Moreover
, other
students
 are motivated
form
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this
. They think to get appreciation from their teacher and principal.
On the other hand
, moderate
students
 are inspiring to another
student
. Their effort to achieve good grade is more than higher IQ
students
. They know the true meaning of
hardwork
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hard work
 and dedication.
Furthermore
, to achieve something in life.
Another
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students
 think that if that moderate
student
get
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gets
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reward
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a reward
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then
 they
also
 do
this
. It is
teachers
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the teachers
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 responsibility to appreciate that
student
 who
consantly
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constantly
 improving in the exams. To conclude, I think that
student
 whose grade improve from
previous
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the previous
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 result deserve more rewards than topper
one's
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ones
one
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. He/she studies day and night to improve themself.
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