Essay Question 1. Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

Price
is
a
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one of
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when
people
buying some goods,
such
as cell
phones
or choosing services like medical treatment. Other think that it is important to include
price
as a main factor in retail and service transaction, yet in my opinion,
people
are no longer sensitive in
price
issue. They will think and consider other factors that influence
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consumption behaviours. The factors will be conveyed in the below paragraphs.
Firstly
, technology has become a part of our daily life and
people
use technology to support their jobs. They will compare gadgets' specification and functions as their main considerations. For some
people
, they are willing
splurge
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more money in order to get cell
phones
which can support their needs.
For example
, social media darlings and content creators will choose cell
phones
with
best
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quality
in
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cameras to produce clear still photos and videos. Others
such
as graphic designers
for
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instance,
are prefer
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to invest in tablets than mobile
phones
. So that, they can get products that suit
with
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their objectives.
Secondly
, users
also
believe in reputation when choosing services or purchasing products. The trend of writing honest reviews on the Internet
also
changes
people
's orientation on products. It is easier for them to select amongst many options provided.
For instance
, when they type brands on search engines, the
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learning will crawl the most read review with the highest scores and suggest the best services they can choose. If they find
suggestion
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the suggestion
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that matches with their preferences,
price
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the price

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will be less major. In conclusion,
people
are willing to spend more money if the technology or service
are
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suitable
with
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their needs and preferences, so they will not consider
price
as a big issue.
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