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Essay Question 1. Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

Price
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one of
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the considerations
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 when
people
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 buying some goods,
such
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 as cell
phones
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 or choosing services like medical treatment. Other think that it is important to include
price
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 as a main factor in retail and service transaction, yet in my opinion,
people
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 are no longer sensitive in
price
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 issue. They will think and consider other factors that influence
thier
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their
 consumption behaviours. The factors will be conveyed in the below paragraphs.
Firstly
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, technology has become a part of our daily life and
people
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 use technology to support their jobs. They will compare gadgets' specification and functions as their main considerations. For some
people
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, they are willing
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 more money in order to get cell
phones
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 which can support their needs.
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, social media darlings and content creators will choose cell
phones
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 with
best
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 quality
in
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cameras to produce clear still photos and videos. Others
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 as graphic designers
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for
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 instance,
are prefer
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 to invest in tablets than mobile
phones
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. So that, they can get products that suit
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their objectives.
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, users
also
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 believe in reputation when choosing services or purchasing products. The trend of writing honest reviews on the Internet
also
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 changes
people
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's orientation on products. It is easier for them to select amongst many options provided.
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, when they type brands on search engines, the
mechine
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machine
 learning will crawl the most read review with the highest scores and suggest the best services they can choose. If they find
suggestion
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the suggestion
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 that matches with their preferences,
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price
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 will be less major. In conclusion,
people
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 are willing to spend more money if the technology or service
are
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 suitable
with
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 their needs and preferences, so they will not consider
price
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 as a big issue.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • prioritize
  • manage finances
  • high quality
  • affordable
  • effective
  • durable
  • essential services
  • efficacy
  • compromise one's health
  • long-term savings
  • durability
  • efficiency
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