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People use computers more extensively these days than ever before, and it is so extensive in our modern world that even children have access to these devices to play games or watch videos. This essay discusses the disadvantages of playing digital games on computer devices by youngsters and suggests some measures to reduce such negative effects.

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Nowadays the
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 of
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 is increased
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 alarming rate all over the world. Children
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use
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 a
computer
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 for playing
games
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 and
videos
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.
This
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 essay will show the bad effect of
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games
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 on our young generations and here we find some way to decrease the negative impacts. A
computer
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 is now very essential for our everyday life.  Because of shrink the size of a
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 we
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 it as
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 device from morning tonight.
People
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use
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 a mobile as their primary
computer
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 to watch the news and social content. Young
people
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 more engaged with a mobile phone as they have more extra
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 they play
games
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 and watch
videos
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. They waste their
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 watching unnecessary
videos
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 and addictive
games
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. Whereas the young generation need to study a lot for their future but they are addicted to the
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. It
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 breaks the sleep cycle of young
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 when using it at the night. Mobile phone display radiates harm full light ray which damage retina. Instate of play physical
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 young generation is more used to
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games
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 which harm their physical strengths and fitness. They become fattier and suffer for a long
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 in different disease in near future.
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 to get rid of
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 negative effect of a
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 we should find some solution to train our brain not to fall into the trap of
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 game and
video
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. In the morning we shouldn't check our mobile phone
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 one hour. We shouldn't
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 it for more than 30 min for unnecessary
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 or
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. They should play
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 or
video
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 as reword after successfully complete their important task. Another task is we should
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 a screen
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 limiter which will allocate specific
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 for different activities. When they can't resist their temptation for playing
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 or watch the
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 they should go for a walk outside of their home. In spite of having lots of advantages
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 have some negative effect on our life. If we
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 smartly and handle
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 by limiting
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 for
games
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 and
videos
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. young
people
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 can
use
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 their youth for their bright future.

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