A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seems important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
These days, it seems that personal wealth and position in
society
Use synonyms
are the only bases on which a person’s merit is judged. Sadly, I think it is true, nowadays in our
society
Use synonyms
appearance is everything and
unfortunately
Add a comma
,unfortunately
show examples
traditional
values
Use synonyms
are no longer important. There are several reasons why I agree with
this
Linking Words
statement.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the
society
Use synonyms
in which we live is deeply interested in looks; we are “bombarded” with images over and over again which impose us, unconsciously, a model that we have to adhere to.
In other words
Linking Words
, individuals love following celebrities on social media, admiring and coveting their wealthy lifestyle possessions.
People
Use synonyms
have
this
Linking Words
misguided notion that they are idols to emulate, and it is very sad that
people
Use synonyms
do not want to accept that their “perfect” life, in reality, is not true. To demonstrate how much our life is conditioned from an image, a teacher along with a group of students conducted a survey sending two CVs, exactly the same but attaching two different pictures of the candidates (one with a picture of a girl who looked very nice and the other CV with a picture of an overweight girl). The result was that two out of three times, the nice-looking girl was called for an interview.
Secondly
Linking Words
, it is noticeable that teens are the most vulnerable section of our
society
Use synonyms
. For them appearance is everything and, if for any reason someone cannot afford to buy branded clothes or simply does not care about these trivial things,
then
Linking Words
he is negatively judged and kicked out of the group.
People
Use synonyms
are judged for worthless things,
such
Linking Words
as hairstyle, outfit, makeup, model of phone, car, house...
Finally
Linking Words
, even if nowadays aspect is everything, some
people
Use synonyms
still care about traditional
values
Use synonyms
.
For instance
Linking Words
, those who do volunteer work or charity do so because they want to help
people
Use synonyms
and still believe in moral
values
Use synonyms
. These actions are highly valued by modern
society
Use synonyms
. In conclusion, I firmly believe that today our
society
Use synonyms
is too influenced by
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
appearance and personal possessions.
Therefore
Linking Words
, we must teach our young generations about old
values
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
as honour, kindness and trust, in order for them to thrive and succeed in the future.
Submitted by irenedemartini on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
What to do next:
Look at other essays: