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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#food #part #life #effects #lifestyle #diet
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 of changes in our lifestyles. With technology invading and conquering our life we have become more used to
this
 fast-paced life and have welcomed some major variations in the type of
food
 we intake. Fast
food
 has become part and parcel of our daily lives. I agree that humans depending more and more on
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fast
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fast-food
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food
 has some adverse effects on their health and are more prone to have negative effects
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 their routine.
Firstly
, we see that in
this
 fast-paced work we are depending on fast
foods
 to provide for our daily needs of
food
 supply. They are easily accessible and ready to eat within few minutes.
This
 is impacting our health tremendously causing severe health issues including obesity and heart problems. Fast
foods
 taste better and addict able due to several ingredients being used while making them.
As a result
, we are compelled to buy these type of
foods
 rich in carbohydrates and fat though we are aware of the consequences.
Furthermore
,
fast
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food
 industry is causing severe hazards for
environment
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the environment
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 as well. For
food
 to stay longer the junk industry packages them in plastics
that
is
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 dangerous to the atmosphere which
are
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 well known to everyone. It spoils the soil, clogs the drains and is causing harmful effects on marine life when it reaches
sea
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the sea
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. Eating habits in a family have changed drastically. Gone are the days when
family
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 used to sit together and have elaborate and healthy meals.
Now a days
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 everyone just wants to munch whatever is available and get going with their work as soon as possible.
This
 brings in negative consequences where individuals in a family are not able to bond with each other. To conclude Fast
foods
, have
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 impact on our lives and environment and I think its high time that we expel them from our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proliferation
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Caloric intake
  • Addictive
  • Nutritional deficit
  • Culinary traditions
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Immediate gratification
  • Lifestyle diseases
  • Homogenization
  • Processed foods
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