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Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some would argue that Arts are vital as other
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subjects
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 in elementary-level education.
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 in primary school. An individual will be worthy for society in future if he has awareness about arts.
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 to say, listening to music,
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reading novel is the food for our inner mind and when someone knows about them in school level
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 he could apply
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 gather from there into their practical
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, when someone has more
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 his
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subjects
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 he knows the world in a more practical way
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, he can take steps in the more arranged way in any ups and downs in
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, recent research has shown that students from non-academic
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 can manage activity more than from
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 subject. A support engineer or a computer analyst sometimes found socially awkward.
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 because they are so engrossed in laptop and the internet that they simply don’t care about the outside world so, they become isolated from society day by day. It is often found that the doctor and the engineer are socially not presentable because of their professional practice but if they have some
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 in Arts
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 it will help them later in their
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, doctors and engineer who participated in school dramas in their childhood are more popular with their client. In conclusion, being educated only in the
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 subject is not a good idea for proper development. Young people should learn about painting, music, dramas in their childhood because by learning those they will be a more acceptable citizen in society and will able to avoid awkwardness later in
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 due to lack of extra-curriculum
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic development
  • fostering
  • emotional intelligence
  • problem-solving skills
  • cultural awareness
  • curriculum
  • engaging
  • memorable
  • nurture
  • talents
  • core subjects
  • academic
  • professional success
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