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Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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overseas is a chalangbale condition. A group of people believe in
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 opinion, because of improving their county.
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 I agree with
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 belief, a few disadvantages of it will be explained in
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 negative aspect of Sending
Students
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 Abroad is referred to economic issues of those
countries
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. In fact, developing
countries
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 are the main home
countries
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 of
students
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 who are studied in Europe and other developed
countries
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.
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 a lot of money has been spent
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 these
students
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 which may increase financial problems for other people of their
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. The other side effect of studying overseas is related to
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 immigration of
students
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 to the host country, due to lack of opportunities in their
countries
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. Diminish proportion of these
students
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 who are categorised as
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 in their
countries
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 with ordinary people, may decrease population intelligence quality (I.Q.),
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 the development of their
countries
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 might be postponed.
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 to disadvantages, sending student for studying in foreign
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, have crucial positive results. The most important aspect of
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advantags
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advantage
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 is related to the improvement of education in the
countries
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 of
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. A small number of those scholars may return to their homes, though they have a strong capacity to influence
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their compatriots and develop their territories. These
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 play as a bridge between the country of studying and the state of their origin which facilitate
trade
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 of sciences, knowledge and merchandises.
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 of these trades, the economy of the community has been improved
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consequently
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 the gap between developed and developing
countries
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 will be decreased. In conclusion, sending scholars to developed
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 for continuing studying, has many positive results on home’s country.
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 primary investments for these scholars are high, these
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 can increase education’s quality and Per capita income of their territories.
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