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Some people say that historical buildings should be knocked down while others say that they should be preserved. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Every country has historical
buildings
 that illustrate their ancestor's stories.
However
, the public thinks that those
buildings
 are not supposed to be preserved and should be demolished.
This
 idea
also
 has contra from others, who want to keep the historical walls. Each view has its own perspective and I will discuss these ideas in the below paragraphs. Many old
buildings
 have been built for many years and it made the building's life span is getting old. The basic foundation and its soil are getting weaker that can harm other surroundings. In order to prevent the walls to decay, the
buildings
 should be demolished and rebuilt with strong materials that will
last
 more than decades.
Therefore
, it is reasonable to demolish the site for security objectives.
However
, others think that the historical
buildings
 should be preserved as an appreciation to their heroes. The
buildings
also
 can become educational centres and amusement sites from hospitality perspectives. These benefits are not only for the
people
 themselves but
also
 for the government.
Firstly
,
people
 will be more appreciative of their elders who fought for their countries while remembering their past efforts.
Secondly
, the government can be benefited from the existence of these walls. They can revamp the historical spots to be museum centres that can be visited by students or scholars.
Also
, the places
also
 invite
people
 from other countries to enjoy and learn the countries' history.
For example
, an old building of Bank Indonesia has been functioned as a museum for some years and has been visited by students and tourists.
Thus
, it generates more benefits for all sides, especially in tourism. To conclude, the historical
buildings
 should be taken care of by the authority and the
people
 despite the age reasons. For
buildings
 that have shown damages, the government should renew and rebuilt to avoid construction accident. The new brand
buildings
 can be entertainment places for
people
 themselves or the guests from other places.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Heritage conservation
  • Historical edifice
  • Cultural legacy
  • Architectural marvel
  • Preservationist
  • Urban landscape
  • Economic revitalization
  • Tourist hub
  • Adaptive reuse
  • Cultural fabric
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Civic identity
  • Preservation criteria
  • Structural integrity
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