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Today children are spending much more time watching TV compared to the past. Why do you think this happens? Is this a positive or a negative change?

#children #time #tv #change
Watching
TV
 is
one
 of youth's most enjoyable hobby when they are indoors. Nowadays, some people consider that unlike in the past, the tendency of spending long periods of
time
 following their favourite
tv
 shows has increased substantially, mainly due to an enormous diversity and the ability to select which
one
 they prefer. I believe that with supervision,
this
 can have a positive impact on them. When it comes to watching television, the main reason would be the variety of
programs
such
 as cartoons. There are channels that emit 24 hours per day continuously different cartoons for the younger generation.
This
 can keep a child in front of the screen for long periods of
time
 as they enjoy their favourite characters in different scenarios. Cartoon Network,
for instance
, is broadcasting every single day of the week without any interruptions, because of
this
, the number of viewers has been increasing every year.
This
 can have a detrimental impact on toddler's health, sleeping routine and social skills as they would not spend
time
 outdoors. Clearly,
tv
programs
such
 as
this
one
 should be regulated and broadcast interruptions should occur at set times each day. If children are supervised while watching,
this
 can benefit them.
Although
 watching some
programs
 can bring disadvantages, some
programs
 in a different language can help
one
 to learn new words and later to have the ability to become bilingual. In Romania,
for example
, children have been watching most of the
tv
programs
 in English for the
last
 twenty years.
This
 not only allowed them to be fluent in English as they grew up but
also
 to build up an advantage over those ones that did not.
This
 can help them later in life if they would choose to live abroad.
In other words
, with supervision, benefits will arise. In conclusion, even though the
time
 spent by children watching
TV
 will continue to rise, I think that with enough supervision good results can be achieved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • educational content
  • entertainment
  • relaxation
  • physical activity
  • cultural exposure
  • mental health
  • visual skills
  • auditory skills
  • advertisements
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