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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
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Fossil fuels are one of the most widely used energy-generating resources for all motorcars, which are in the improvisation of technology throughout the world. It is argued that
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 worked on fossil-fuel-based are substituted by electricity.
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, I strongly agree with
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 statement, as they act as a medium for air pollution by burning fossil fuels and provides substantial safety by using electrically generated energy. To start with, fuel
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 cause air pollution as a number of harmful gases are released from automobile
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.
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, in the modern developed countries like Bangladesh and Chile, many people have their own mode of transportation which has witnessed plenty of usage of
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 which ought to consume millions of populations causing various types of heart, pulmonary, and cancer diseases. Another thing is that, in comparison with fuel gas station, electric ones
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 safer in maintaining.
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places with tanks full of gas, it is quite easy to get involved
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 the danger, due to improper human’s behaviour on the station,
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 as smoking cigarette, or a natural effect like the lighting, unlike with electricity stations where smoking won’t be the reason of explosion. To illustrate, the statistic for the
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 fifty years shows that the number of accidents in Spain related to the fire is three times higher on the places for charging fuel
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. In conclusion,
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 which produce exhaust gases have to be changed to electrical machines.
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, I agreed with that due to the harmful impact on the atmosphere and safety using electric charge stations.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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