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Some people think governments should spend money on measures to save languages with few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of money of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are conflicting views regarding whether some neglected
languages
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 with minor speakers should be protected and maintained or not.
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 essay will discuss both views, followed by my own perspectives. The individuals who advocate harnessing fundraise more efficiently may have
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 ideas. Undeniably, the protection of these
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 would involve complex processes ranging from setting up some language classes and recruiting some teachers or experts mastering
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this
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languages
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, which could lead to
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 enormous financial burden on charitable organizations or local authority. Unfortunately, with dramatically high input, it is tricky for us to see some extraordinary breakthroughs in
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 or other aspects from protecting these historian and cultural treasures.
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, protecting these
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 is unnecessary.
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, the people who are highlighting the significance of
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 these endangered
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 may
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persuasive thinking.
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, these
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 are inextricably bound up with local minorities’ values, beliefs and history. These people may become disillusioned with finding that their
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 featuring their cultures are gradually dying out, which would decrease their sense of belongings
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nation
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the nation
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, leading to conflicts with
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another ethnicity
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.
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 trend could develop into the dissociation of
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 in the end.
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, maintaining these exotic
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 could
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 appeal
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 linguists who want to learn more about these
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 to visit particular regions boasting these linguistic elements, which will
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 drive the demand
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 local accommodation or food, increasing the employment rate and incomes of natives, developing local economy as a whole. As discussed above, we are not oblivious to the importance of these
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 and
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 are supposed to protect them for they will both strengthen our nation’s stability and economy.
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 why China, a country with more than 5000 years
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, spend a great deal of money every year to preserve meaningful folkways including these
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