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In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#countries #europe #children #age #schools #skills #job #education #students #world #work
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I know in most of the European
countries
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 they will ask
children
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 to start working after the
age
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 of 11. But In the same region, few nations do not agree with the statement. I will put my comments on
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 and explain why schooling is more important rather than, working in the early stage.
First
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, In
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age
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 group
children
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, they are not ready to
work
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. They can't understand what is wrong and what is good for them. If they will come out from the school after the
age
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 of 11-13. They can
work
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, But, Their
future
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 is spoiling. Even they don't know about that. They are not ready to
work
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 with the world.
On the other hand
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, If
children
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 continue their
education
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 in school after the
age
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 of 11. They will a lot of new things. In
this
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 way, We can evolve the Good skills, Understanding level, Maturity into the
children
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. So, In the
future
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, they can understand with their ability and take the appropriate decision for their
future
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. We will ready them to
work
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 with the world. Most of the
countries
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 are very strict will the
children
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education
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 system. They want every institution to provide a world-class
education
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 to every
child
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 and prepare them for the
future
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. In
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 way,
children
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 learn most of the things and help our country to develop.
For Instance
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, In the US
education
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 system is very strong, they will not allow any
child
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 to
work
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. Even parents are aware of it. If they found something like
children
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 are working. They will put a heavy fine on their parents and firm. In Conclusion, If
countries
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 are not focusing on their
education
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 as compared to
work
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 in small
age
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.
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 somehow, They will not protect their nation and not making it powerful Like the US. Those
countries
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 are strict to follow the
education
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 and knowledge about the importance of it. Those nations are powerful in the current world.
Education
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 is the right of every
child
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. We need to stop
child
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 labour.
Submitted by Chandan Kumar Singh on

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