If a product is good and meet customer needs,then people will buy it. So advertising it is unneccessary. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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plenty

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they will buy that

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not required.

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false dreams and hopes in customers.

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shows, it will fair the

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in just

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seven

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that they will be fair after applying

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advertisements

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industry

spending so much money to fool their customers as most of the products are not actually meant to work, they are only for playing customer’s emotions.

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a bald man get the hair in just fifteen days.

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product

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should be controlled. As it is responsible for lots of false information.

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Some believe the primary purpose of museums is to entertain people, while others believe their purpose is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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