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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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As we all know
immigration
 is an increasingly common occurrence and can be seen in most
countries
, especially in
third
 world
countries
. In
this
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 I am going to explicate the reasons that lead
people
 to immigrate from their native
countries
 to other
countries
, and all the consequences that
this
 action has.
First
 of all, I think everybody knows the most popular reason why
people
 move to another place, which is to try to find a better life, economically speaking, they think there are more opportunities in the working world because they could not find them in their country. Especially families who want to find a better future for their children,
for
instance
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 to have a good education.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, there are
countries
 where you cannot have a decent life because of political problems,
such
 as Palestine, which is in
a
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continuous war.
On the other hand
, we find the consequences that
immigration
 leaves us with, one of the most important of which is the depiction of many
people
 who had high expectations but are faced with the harsh reality that it is not as perfect as it seems.
Also
 one of the biggest problems is the overpopulation in these
countries
 due to
the
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 large number of
people
 each year. After
all
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 things considered, I reckon that
immigration
 will continue to increase in the future, and yet more and more efforts are being made to curb illegal
immigration
,
for example
.
Although
 I still believe that it is impossible to stop it,
however
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 it can be reduced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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