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Nowadays,families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this.why is this happening?do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

#families #people #trend
While people think that
student
 should be learning essential subjects, others believe that
student
 should be learning
food
science
 and how to cook
food
, and I agree with
this
 point of view.
To begin
, the compulsory subjects,
for example
, mathematic,
science
 and history, have crucial knowledge for
student
's
future
 in a higher degree. These subjects can help the
student
 to acknowledge the basic of all academics study and being the best way to prepare students for their
future
 university education and career.
On the contrary
, learning how to cook and understanding the
science
 of
food
 can lead the
student
 get much more benefits.
Food
 is the basic need of creature, especially human which present in each continent that has a signature dish of each country. If the
student
 learns about the
science
 of
food
, they would understand how each ingredient is made and can know the nature of taste and can mix it in a good way.
Moreover
, the
student
 can be cooking for themself when they have to go camping or even though working and live far from hometown, take my experience
for example
, after COVID-19 restriction, I have to work from home and avoiding to eat foods in the restaurant, so I try to cook for myself to be sure that no determinate.
In addition
, they keep cooking skill to be their career in the
future
. In conclusion, the
student
 should learn the important subject for their
future
 in a higher degree, while they should know how to prepare the
food
 to survive.
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