Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

I believe it's depending on a person to person choice.
Television
is a part of our life. But most of them would like to invest their leisure
time
in social activities.
others
would be watching a movie or series. But I do not agree with the statement and going to discuss
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point. Nowadays, People are more socialized as compare to the previous generation. With the help of
a
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technology, we can communicate with
others
very easily and discussed important points or meet our friends and family online through multiple social media website or applications. It's not required to go out, you can meet your loved
onces
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ones
online with the help of
internet
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.
For example
, If you don't have
a
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time
to travel or meet physically. Still, you can talk to your friends and support
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using
the
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Skype or Facebook. Apart from
this
, If the weather is not good you can make a plan for
tour
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or organize any social event.
On the other hand
, If we are talking about the past like 10 years ago, At that
time
, most
of
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people want to spend their
time
to watch
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television
. they don't want to meet
others
why because
television
was new at that
time
. So, everyone wants to spend their free
time
to
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watching
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a
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movies or serials.
For instance
, In
earlier
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age,
Television
is new
into
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the market and everyone can't afford it. So, they are using free
time
to watching
a movies
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movies
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in
neighbours
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house. Now, everyone
having
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a
television
in their homes. In conclusion, Most
of
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the
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People are busy with their personal or social
stuffs
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stuff
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instead
of, wasting a
time
to
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watching
a
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TV. If they are available, want to help
others
or use leisure
time
to chitchat with family and friends on video calls, Participated in social events.
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