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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Vaccines
 are now able to prevent various illness among
children
 which were earlier considered as incurable.
Therefore
, some people believe that
parents
 should be bound by the rules and regulations to get their
children
 vaccinated while some others believe,
parents
 should have the freedom to make
choice
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the choice
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 of the vaccine. I believe that regulatory authorities need to implement
set
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a set
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 of strict rules.
To begin
 with,
vaccination
 has changed the life
to
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of
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 many
children
 with its numerous benefits. Many diseases, which have cursed the life of many, are completely controlled by
vaccination
 programmes. Take
for example
 Polio in India. With the help of various
vaccination
 campaign by the government, not even a single case is reported in recent years in India.
Besides
,
Children
 are thought to be the future of any country and they must be protected at any cost.
Vaccines
 help a child to grow without any harmful and
lifetaking
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life-taking
life taking
 illness by improving their immunity.
Therefore
, it is right to make
vaccines
 mandatory for
children
.
However
, sometimes,
children
 are forced to go through countless
vaccination
 programmes, and many of them are painful for
children
 as it needs to be injected in the body of a child with injection.
Moreover
, governments are still implementing some
vaccines
 that are no longer required or rewarding for
children
. In
such
 cases,
parents
 should be able to make
decision
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a decision
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 whether the vaccine is needed for their
children
. In conclusion, vaccinations are a blessing for
children
 and
parents
 must be obliged to get their
children
 vaccinated every time. Strong laws will be a positive development to secure
children
' future.
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