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Many people think that fast food companies should not be allowed to advertise while others believe that all companies should have the right to advertise. Do you agree or disagree

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The power of effective advertisements is undeniable. In our daily
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 we can see different posters everywhere,
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 mainly because advertisement has become
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modern art.
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, some
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 assert that commercials of fast
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 should not be allowed, whereas others argue that all companies should have equal rights to advertise. In
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 I will address both sides of the argument and explain my support of the former view. Convincing arguments can be made to support the idea of freedom to advertise fast
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 of all, it is important to understand that eating pizza or a burger once or twice a week doesn't harm a person's health. More specifically, fast
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 mostly contains
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bun, meat, vegetables and sauces, none of these ingredients is actually harmful, the exception is having the same fast
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 regular
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, there are more harmful products like cakes, sugar-containing drinks, etc.
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 banning fast
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 advertisements will not solve healthy eating issues among the population, staying healthy is the personal choice of every individual.
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, for many
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 having a quick hamburger may be extremely convenient and affordable compared to going to a restaurant and having a dish
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 is two or three times more expensive.
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, posters of fast
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 can give consumers valuable information about bargains, promotions and contents. To sum up, I would concede that fast
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 may be harmful
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people
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. Despite that,
people
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 should be free to choose what they want to eat, after
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 market supply will change only when demand changes. Overall, I am convinced that fast
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 companies should have
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 to promote their products.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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