Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Few
people
claim that various kind of
information
should be shared as much as possible. Others,
however
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,however
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thought that the
information
which
have
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has
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more value should not be shared freely.
This
essay will discuss both views and will give
reason
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a reason
the reason
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why necessary
information
should be shared freely. On the one hand, if
information
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the information
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shared freely,
then
people
can know about
this
and able to
use
in their life. When
information
will available for everyone,
then
they can collect and decide whether
this
will good or bad for them. If they find
those knowledge
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that knowledge
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effective for them,
then
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they
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can utilize it in their daily life.
As a result
, they will be benefited when they choose the
information
for them.
For instance
, when
business related
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business-related
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information
will available for each individual,
then
a man who wants to starts a new business,
he
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apply
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can learn more about business, which will be helpful for him.
On the other hand
, some valuable
information
which can create
probblem
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problem
problems
for human should not be shared easily. The main reason behind
thisis
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this is
people
can
use
the
Information
for
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to
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harm
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harming
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the
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apply
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society.
For example
, if theory related poison known by everybody,
then
it
them
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apply
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bring some problem.
The negative
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minded
people
can
use
the
Information
for harming human
beigns
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beings
begins
. So the
information
which can create a problem for society should not be shared freely. In my opinion, the
information
which is necessary for
people
should be shared freely. Because
people
can gather knowledge from them and can
use
in
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it in
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their life. In conclusion, valuable or too important
information
should not
shared
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be shared
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freely because
this
can be an issue for human.
However
,
information
which is helpful for human should be shared freely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • accelerates progress
  • innovative discoveries
  • transparency
  • open access
  • verify results
  • fraudulent
  • ethical practices
  • consumer trust
  • potential risk
  • misuse
  • sensitive information
  • genetic data
  • defense-related technologies
  • proprietary information
  • trade secrets
  • competitive edge
  • value
  • investment of time and resources
  • compensation
  • disincentivize
  • recoup costs
  • balanced approach
  • policies and agreements
  • sensitive data
  • fair compensation
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