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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia nad France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia nad France in 1980 and 2000.
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The pie charts give information about how
units
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 of
electricity
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 were produced using different fuel sources in two countries, namely Australia and France, in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the total amount of
unites
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 highly soared from 1980 to 2000.
In addition
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, the usage of nuclear
power
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 as an
electricity
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 production source immensely jacked up until 2000,
whereas
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 and natural gas almost disappeared as sources at the same time. As can be seen in the pie charts, nuclear
power
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 sharply rose from 15
units
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 to 126 and was responsible for nearly two of
third
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electricity
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 generation.
However
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, natural gas plummeted from 25
units
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 to 2
units
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 in 2000 and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 slightly declined to 2
units
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, before being at 5
units
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 in 1980. Turning to coal and oil, both produced 25
units
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 in 2000. The usage of coal as a source
for
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electricity
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 production remained stable. Meanwhile, oil
increase
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increased
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 by 10
units
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 to 25
units
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 over 40 years.
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