Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Traffic congestion is increased across the globe, due to the incline demand
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motor vehicles and it leads to
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accident.
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, many individuals opine that increasing the maximum legal age of people for driving cars and motorbikes can be useful in
road
safety. I am in complete accord with the given ideology and the reasons for my opinion will be elucidated in the
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paragraphs will the relevant
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. To commence with, there are numerous factors to agree with
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notion.
Firstly
, teenagers are not matured enough to ride bike or cars.
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this
age, they do not care about life and ride a bike to enjoy
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their friends. Sometimes, they drove more than two
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on a bike that leads to
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a road
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accident.
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, according to
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that conducted by
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traffic control board, 60% of
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accidents occurred by youngsters who are under age.
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, they put their life and other people
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in danger by rash driving.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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