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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #boys #girls #schools #benefit
A glance at the given graphs
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 the information regarding prices, promotional discounts, and advertising budget by the 7 various tablet stores. Apparently, in terms of
price
,
Smith
store
 has the lowest
price
 ($180) which is almost one-
third
 of
store
Nova
's average rate ($565), but it offers only
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%
discount
that is
 one-fifth compared to
Nova
's
discount
 (25%).
Lewis
 has the
second highest
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price
 of sale and rate of
discount
 ($460 and 20% respectively).
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 all other stores sell tablets with nearly the same amount ranges between $299 and $312, with
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% of
discount
. To look at sales volume while providing discounts, we can clearly see that
Nova
 and
Lewis
 who
offere
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offer
offered
offers
 more
dicount
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discount
 attract more buyers and the proportion of sales are higher (23% and 22% respectively).
Smith
store
,
however
,
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dose
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 not
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a sale
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sale
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 that much and remains at 4% of
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 while promotion time. Other stores here
also
 remains at the same proportion of selling (12% to 14%). When it comes to advertising fund,
store
Smith
 pays nothing, while
Lewis
 and
Nova
 contribute a
significant
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 lesser amount ($18,000 and $21,000 respectively) than
other
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another store
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store
 that offers dramatically the highest amount, between $67,000 to $ 70,000. To conclude,
Smith
 does not pay
niether
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neither
 to advertising nor offer
discount
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;
hence
, it can only
sale
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 minimal volumes of tablets.
In contrast
, by offering the highest
discount
 and
price
,
Nova
 and
Lewis
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 sales show
a remarkably high percentages
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a remarkably high percentage
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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