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Nowadays, the use of animal testing in medical research has become a hot topic. Some people believe that animal testing should be banned, whereas others claim it is necessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the present age, animal testing is considered to be a sensitive topic being widely spread and discussed. Some
people
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 that animal testing in medical research is necessary, whilst others consider it cruel. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support of the former view. One of the main factors
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 using
animals
 for testing purposes is the possibility
to save
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 the lives of
people
 around the globe. To start with, nowadays there are many illnesses that still require medical
researches
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,
such
 as cancer or recent
COVID 19
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. Scientists around the world work on inventing new treatments
however
, it is very dangerous to test newly invented medicine on
people
.
Consequently
, drugs should be tested on
animals
first,
for safety reasons and side effects.
For instance
, mice and rabbits have similar body
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 to certain
medicine
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;
therefore
 testing on
animals
 would reveal all the side effects. Of course, testing on
animals
 does not guarantee, that the treatment is 100% safe for human life, even so, it may prevent serious negative outcomes.
In contrast
, some may claim that
animals
 can frequently suffer from extreme pain
while
 being tested.
This
 point should be considered by scientists,
animals
 should be given painkillers;
this
 way,
animals
 can be saved from experiencing pain.
To sum up
, I am convinced, that animal testing should be acceptable only for medical
researches
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, as it would help to save the lives of hundreds and thousands of
people
. I strongly believe that
animals
 should have rights and
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 suffering should be kept to a minimum.
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task response
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs are logically connected and the ideas flow smoothly from one to the next.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • morally wrong
  • ethical considerations
  • animal rights
  • exploited
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • human-patient simulators
  • life-saving treatments
  • stricter regulations
  • minimize
  • humanely
  • biological differences
  • predict human outcomes
  • economic implications
  • cost-efficient
  • medical advancements
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